Comments : Feeling she wont forget

  • 15 years ago

    by CrossCut

    I really enjoyed this powm and I can relate to it on many levels.
    "Every day she wore a smile
    It would cover up her pain
    Not even her parents knew
    She couldn't take the strain"

    ^ I thought this was a really strong paragraph, telling about the pain and then referring to the strain of it all on her.

    I also liked the ending paragraph. It ended everything nicely and pulled it to a great close at the end. 5/5

  • 15 years ago

    by emily mackay

    This is really good shows strong emotion and i can agree with the bit " everyday she wore a smile it would cover up her pain " its really good and sends a good messgae really enjoyed reading keep up the good work.

  • 15 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    This is a truly heartbreaking poem, that really tells the troubles of this girl, and how no one understands the real pain she faces..

    "'She is just doing it for attention'
    That's what they all thought
    They didn't know about her pain
    And the battles she'd fought"

    Well expressed stanza, nice rhyming, this really shows how much misunderstood she was.

    "She lies on her bed crying
    Making the pillow wet
    All this pain and confusion
    Are feelings she won't forget"

    Good ending, very deep and powerful. Overall, nice job, there were so many emotions/feeling pouring out into this poem, and I can tell you wrote this straight from your heart. 5/5 from me, take care. Keep writing, always and forever....

  • 15 years ago

    by Nobodys Hero

    This poem has a very good rhyming flow, great job.
    The emtions involved are very strong and sad so you manage to draw the reader it =]
    5/5