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What she said, haha.
No, but seriously, this was very good, I can get a sense of the emotion while reading. That's what poetry should do, give you a taste of a feeling.

Bravo.

Really Nice written.....

i agree , there are no happy endings.... just fake smiles we end things with.......

Nicely written...

though we show we expect nothing from life.....secrelty we do....bold on the outside but cold on the inside........but if the good times dont stay.....then neither will the bad ones ^^,

peace~

Wow i really like this poem of yours.I like how you mix some of the false fairytales that we grow up believeing

That the world truly is not fair,
No fairytale an evil lair,
No vibrant girl with silken hair,
No handsome prince at the end who cares.

^^^ I think this stanza stood out for me ... I like the description on the 2nd and 3rd line. You have crafted this well

Overall you have set a nice tone and also not forgetting you have a nice flow.

5/5

Very Nice. It was like i was sitting right there and you were reading it out loud to me.

Well. I like the other poem better. But it was also alright...

Anyway I can see that you've improved a lot (if you compare this poem with the other)

Your writing skills have greatly improved. Keep up the good work.

The reason I prefer the other poem is.
You repeated the word "no" a lot. Though it might just be me. sorry.

Anyway even though you repeated it a lot the flow went well. The lines were short so it has a lot of 'actions' in it.

Keep writing. I look forward for your future poems.