"He puts a smile on my lips.
He makes my heart skip a beat."
The first line is good, it's semi-original, but the second line is terribly cliche. Doesn't everyone's heart always skip a beat in love poems?

"His words make me melt,
And remind me of the reason I still live."
This is again, cliche. Be careful with love poems that you don't drag too many of these cliche's into your work.

"In his blue eyes I get lost.
I forget how to breathe"
Again, cliche. Forgetting how to breathe isn't that overused, but you still hear it round the place.

"Or even how to speak.
I love him, but only from afar.
I wish I had him in my arms.
Hug him and kiss him if only for a moment. "
This got a little better, the phrases you used were more original.

Overall this is pretty average.
There's a boy, he makes me smile
Whever I see him my heart beats faster
He looks at me and smiles
Makes me want to melt
How I wish he was mine
Is pretty much everywhere over this site. And in poetry elsewhere.
My advice to you would be build up your vocabulary and then build up some better phrases, as metaphor's to use in this. It'll make your work original and more moving but it'll still say the same thing.
The good thing about this, though, was your heart's in it :)
Keep writing.
3/5

jess ~

Awww so sweet, i sure know how you feel on this one =/ another amazing piece of work =)

Awww so sweet, i sure know how you feel on this one =/ another amazing piece of work =)

Short but sweet and i hope you get to hold him in your arms soon. loved the message you portrayed in this, i'm sure every single girl in the world would know whats it's like to love a guy from afar. very well written, another great piece from you. 5/5

Another flawless flow in a neat romantic package

This poem for me was lacking structure and it seems as though you didn't put a lot of thought behind your poem.

I was reviewing it and the lines were very off so much so that it took away from the poem and I had to give it a less than perfect rating.

I was expecting a lot larger of a poem, I still find it was a good job. I did like it and wish that it could have been longer.

I wish I had him in my arms.
Hug him and kiss him if only for a moment.

to long for it to be in this poem..the last line was just too long and sorry to say it took away for me.

4/5

This is cute I suppose, a bit predictable though... you wording is not the greatest you deffinatly have other pieces that are worded so much better, and the flow seemed off to me... still this is a poem that many can relate to and maybe i'm being to harsh because im really not a fan of love poems so im going to give you a 4/5

Easy to relate to. I know that I do. It would have been nice if it was a little longer but it is fine the way it is. 5/5

I really like this poem as well. I am sure I have commented and rated quite a few of your poems in the past and I really like your style. This is a feeling that many people can compare to.

I have to admit that although I rather enjoy the poem I find the ending weak. It is a great line and goes with the poem well, but it doesnt seem finished to me...
But it is all a personal preference so it is still going to receive a 5/5 from me