So wonderful, It sucks you right up and lets you go with a chill... I like how you used the same line in each stanza.... gave it some OOMPH!!:) you should check my latest one out "Phobia of being alone"
I absolutely LOVE this poem. Just cause I can imagine you in every word. the emotion spilled out and i wanted to smile but cry. it was totally amazing. and the way you fit that line in. every stanza had it and it fit perfectly. like, it wasn't just added in there without it fitting the flow.
i like when people use questions in their poems. ya know. give the reader a little "hm?" =)
im not good at criticizing. especially people i love. and honestly. there is nothing for me to critcize in this poem. if there was. i would let you know. but this is pure perfection.
wonderful poem made by a wonderful poet =)
This is Amazing. you created a fairytale for the lonely girl. and its almost as if only you know her secret... shes beautiful, and popular, but lonely.... and tourtured. great job here...
and remember.. i love you girl!