This poem really touched me. I've recently come out of a relationship and I find myself asking God the same questions you do. I'm going to tell you what everyone tells me; if you really want something, God will give it to you, just keep praying.
Your poem was very well written, flow was good, good choice of words and i liked its structure. Definitely could relate to each line. great job =) 5/5.

I absolutely loved this poem. It was so emotional and deep. It hooked me from the start and I liked how you ended it. 5/5 Keep writing!

*tears*

i was touched by this too mine though was because i while back the guy closest to me was killed and i asked God these question why he had taken him? and why we couldnt be together? but i was seriously touched by this poem it was amazing

Beautiful poem.
rhythem was wonderful.
added to favorites.
5/5

Oh wow this was a touching, and very deep poem. It was sweet and caring how you talked to god asking for him back. And at the end, basically saying if he was supposed to be yours, he'd come back.

This was a very heart-warming poem. Both beautiful, and lovely. It was a specail poem I think. Great job

5/5

This went really deeep..! absolutely love it!!
most ppl would say they kno what it feels like.. trust me, i say the same thing.. but its a matter of time and patience and God will give you exactly what you need <3

5/5.. keep it up!!

This is one of the first poems that i wanted to read till the very end!
It touched me very much and its very deep!!
I had tears in my eyes by the end! I lost a boyfriend and it was almost what i was saying when i lost him!!
Very touching ..

Keep writing :)

This is a very sad and sweet love poem. The wording and flow was perfact. Nice format and it was just the right length. I gave it a 5/5.

I feel like Ive heard this before but this is much better then the last one i was forced to read and Im glad i got a chance to get my eyes onto this one, This poem shows how much religious people do acutaly believe that he helps and he does, (I better not get any religious messages now) but most people think that repeating lines sometimes kills the flow in poems but not if its done right and enough emotion put behind it, very simple ryhme schemes, easy to read, flow is lost at times and to many beats are put into it, but theres not enough reason to give it a 4 so still a 5

Wow. i find this piece. intrequate, powerful, deep and emotional. emotionas were everywhere. very good. i love it.
--aprilsconspiracy

Aww
This was sweet...really sad, and really sweet.

I enjoyed reading it. The flow bothered me *just* a tad, but it was nice over all.

Good job! Keep writing!
4/5

Nice work. I like it cant say i love it. It felt like your begging to much but at the same time i cant say much. I have the same problem. Very deep and true. LOVE the flow though. YOur poems are outstanding keep up the good work and some day get your stuff ina book. I sure buy it.
-Jamilla

First off, this was simply beautiful. It truly was. I can feel the love you share for him but I can also feel the sadness and pain you're going through. Amazing.

"Dear God, I'm sorry I sound angry.
I don't blame you,
But, Lord, I don't wanna believe,
That me and him are through."

The second line breaks up the flow a little bit. Instead of "I don't blame you," I would say, "In no way do I blame you,". You don't have to, it's your choice. (: And in the 3rd line, I don't think that the first comma is necessary.

But overall, this poem was great. The flow was pretty much smooth and the emotions were heartbreaking. You did a wonderful job on this one. 5/5

Take care,
Stephanie

Omg! i can soo relate to this!! i think its amazing! well writen and great words, felt your pain i love it! 5/5

Omg .. I i'm so teared up right now .. I just went through a breakup , and that definately shows all the emotions really clearly . The flow and everything is flawless .. You're such an amazing writter .

Oh.. wow!! i this was amzing n awesome!! i love it.. amzing job gurll.. keep it up!! =)

Usually in my opinion a poem with each stanza starting out with the same line as the title gets boring after a while, but you've done an incredible job of starting off, staying on topic, and finishing off impressively. The last stanza really tied everything together beautifully, I could just picture a saddened girl kneeling down praying to the lord above, very nice job.

5/5

Ohh. wow.
amazing.
love the story.
but also the rhymes.
great job!
deff a 5/5!

Im not religious. But still a great poem i could almost feel the pain. 5/5.

"Dear God, I can't take much more.
I'm destroyed inside and out.
I wish that I could say something,
But I swallow all my shouts."

Amazing poem, truly. I would like to give some friendly advice here though. The last line is a bit... off. It doesn't seem to flow with the rest of the poem.. i may have solution though.. instead of "But i swallow all my shouts" maybe try "But i swallow every shout" Because in "Out" there is no 's' like there is in 'shouts' so the flow is off. Thats really all i have to add. Great poem though.
*Chaotic Angel*