I like this one babe, think its real good! 5/5 hun xxx

Sadness and pain are felt in the words you have expressed in your write. May your heart once again feel the peace and joy that you are seeking one day soon.

Sadaddy

That was very beautiful, great job. I love the emotion. defanitly a 5/5...

-mandy :)

Aww I'm so sorry if u going through this.
Painful poem. It got me thinking that moments like thouse adults act themselves like kids and the children who are suffering have to deal with it like adults, it's just awful! Powerful emotions.

Heart-touching story! Noone should be abused, but it's sad that sociaty has turn to this.

5/5 Excelent write!

The rhyme scheme did not take away the power and emotion of the poem at all. I thought the poem was peiced together very well. The thought behind it although saddening can be very true at times, but thankfully it all gets better. I really enjoyed reading this poem, one of my favorites by far. 5/5

Complex :)

I totally agree, and understand what your saying. Adults need to open their eyes to what is going on. The poem was well written, and flowed well, it tells a sad, but true story. I will say though, that it started strong, and it followed through the rest of the poem strong, until the last line, it was good, i just don't think it ended quite as well as the rest of the poem. But i loved it. Keep it up. 5/5 x

Very deep but I do believe that some adults know what's happening at home and just turn a blind eye which I don't agree with. 5/5, Em