(welcome to my dark side!
i'll show u reality
not tales of fairies
where everything's pretty!)

i like the ending........

(rude, hypocrite, evil, manipulator, weak, tired)
u really paint urself well on this poem man....
great poem. nt alot of poet can paint themself on a piece of poem. but u just did BRAVO...... 5/5 for this.
coz this poem is the only one different than the rest of the poem u have.... keep wrting man..... i say once again, This is a great piece......... ;)

I'm rude..
i speak in between line
kill ur rhyme
make them mine
^^^
It was a wierd way to grab the readers attention but it works.

im a hypocrite
i'll present happiness
with laced of laughter
while sorrow engulfed me
loneliness flow with my blood
^^^
the last two lines are kind of choppy
But I like you meaning you put into the stanza.

i'm evil
i spoke with the devil
anger fuel my emotion
vengence's my destination
thru all my chain of strength
will lead me
^^^
This was my favorite stanza. It is very powerful and intense.

i'm a manipulator
i'll grab ur attention
lead u to darkness
confuse ur intention
murder ur inspiration
^^^^
I reallly like the last two lines of this stanza too.
I like how you explained it in a twisted dark way.

i'm weak
crippled by storm of lies
drown in seas of secret
^^^
This makes the reader question. But in a good way. Like you strong in your own ways but the you saw your weak still.

i'm tired
confused with battles in my mind
woken by nightmares in my sweet slumber
continuing my sleepless nights
^^^^
I feel like many readers could really relate to this stanza.

welcome to my dark side!
i'll show u reality
not tales of fairies
where everything's pretty!
^^^
Truthfully ending made me laugh. Becuz reality isn't tales of faries at all.

I really liked the poem I feel like some people could relate to it.