That was amazingly done although filled with real sadness. I could feel the pain within the poem.Flows and rhymes perfectly. Nice pattern as well, but the most important thing is you managed to captured all the emotions you wanted to put in it. And as i read on the image was so vivid and clear Good job.

The love that I saw in her eyes,
A memory, A haze ; It never dies.
adding the semi colon helps the flow here ,

I'm packing my bags ; I'm ready to run.
Holster and knife ; I'm loading my gun.
And here .

Follow your heart ; please let it lead.
I don't care what you want ; Just do what you need! And here .

Other than that , nothing really stood out . Really good rhymes . And in my honest opinion , second parts usually ruin poems .. I like it the way it is .

I can relate to this as I am sure many others can also.I prefure 4 lined stanzas to two ,but that's just my own personal taste.Your word choice was basica and easy to understand.5/5

-Amber

Steven, you are seriously one of my favorite poets. another great write, 5/5.

"Fate travels faster then light."
`You are comparing fate to light.. so therefore, than is needed not then.

Suggestions:
I realized you had puncuation, which was great.. but I think it'd be better if after the first line you had a comma, and the second you had a period for every stanza.

`Make sure to leave spaces between words and commas.. it looks neater.

Other than that, theres nothing I saw wrong with this.. really. Soo, good job. 5/5.