Wow i like it. good job!!!
10/10

I like how the title fit well at the end of the poem. it was my favorite part.

nice job~Ben

I thought you had a good start here, but a few of your lines have too many syllables which throws off your flow. A few quick fixes here and there and you could greatly improve it.

Overall not bad, but room for improvement, keep writing.

I like the emotion. It's pretty dandy.

-Dan