This is beautiful, Holly!

"scraping at the darkness with clumsy hands
that beg to be freed from ignorance"

^^^I love this line! Actually the whole poem is great, but that line stood out the most for me. Also, the ending is fabulous, although heartbreaking... Nice piece, Holly! ;o)

Enjoyable read, thank you for sharing. We continuously learn something everyday. So our ingorance is ever changing. May peace and joy fill your heart each and everyday.

Sadaddy

Nice name! Quaking Ignorance... hmmm... nice!

What is 'lost depths'? just coludn't get you!

How did I come to this
Thinking back to the
moment that I lost all I
thought I would always have
beautiful clarity that clouds my suffering mind

I love this stanza because so many times most of us have felt this way...How did I come to this?
I also like the contrast between "clarity" and clouds my mind...funny how it can actually be both. excellent write.

This is a beautiful write, Holly. :) I loved it.

<beautiful clarity that clouds my suffering mind>
I loved this line. :)

Bri~

Holly,

First of all I'd like to say thank you for commenting on my piece. I do appreciate it muchly. Also thank you for welcoming me to the club. Now onto this piece.

I actually really like this, I like the fact that it was a free verse poem, if it rhyme it really wouldn't of had the same effect on me. I really loved the title, it was unique in my opinion. I expecially liked the word "Quaking" it was different, I hardly here that in poetry so it was a nice change.

"scraping at the darkness with clumsy hands
that beg to be freed from ignorance"

I actually adored the above lines, the meaning behind it was excellent. We often are taken back to a place we thought we out grew. It's sad how life can change directions within a blink of the eye. Leaving us wondering what went wrong.

The only thing that I wasn't sure on was the second stanza because you had alot of "I's" and to me in some places I felt as though the flow was thrown off. I know this was a first person piece so I understand the use of I. I guess it's just my personal preference. It was nothing to reuin this wonderful read though.

This was such a beautiful and yet sad piece. Filled with so much loss. I like the fact that you wrote this as though anyone could relate to it depending on different situations.

Well done.
-Mel