Comments : Sin To Burn

  • 15 years ago

    by Rachel RTVW

    What a sad yet powerful and thought provoking piece. Nicely done!

  • 15 years ago

    by Cindy

    Bill
    What a dark and chilling piece you have penned. The imagery and word choices are great.

    I fell to this prison earth
    Sentenced to eternity
    Banished from the stars
    So many lessons to learn
    Feel the sting, an ethereal burn

    That ethereal burn is the worst. To have to suffer so much to learn the lessons. Just leaves you wondering why?

    Lost yet never alone
    A plague upon the planet
    Detriment to all I see
    Striving to survive
    Never feeling alive

    Sometimes no matter how hard we try we still can't feel alive. To some that feeling was lost a long time ago.

    Excellent job my friend.
    Love Cindy

  • 15 years ago

    by Gesselle Valle

    Wow... bravo my friend! But such a dark and sad poem... makes me think of how I feel. You know I love your writing and I admire every word. I hope everything is going well.

    Keep up the good work & thanks for sharing your talent with us...