You have a very powerful voice. The way your words tie together is amazing. Its so sad yet its beautiful written. I hope you write more soon

- heartless wonder -

Good title for the poem. good language use through out and i liek the use of description, it makes this poem a very good interesting read.

well done and keep it up xx

That is a vary honest write. Vary impressive. I like your writing;-)

I'm adding this to MY FAVORITES. :) i agree, you have a very powerful voice and i love the way you convey your message in this piece. when i first looked at this, without even reading this, i felt slightly overwhelmed by the length, but then i started reading it and i knew i couldn't stop. you drew me in at the very first line and so many people can relate to this kind of poem. amazing job! you're very talented!

This is more of a short story than anything else. not really what i was looking for. but greatly preferable to the four line stanzas with a simple rhyme scheme i find so often. as a story it was quite good and i can relate to it. o all in all quite good

A powerful write and well written,
All the best,
Ben