4th stanze from the bottom reads... They found her is her room... is = in?

i really like this poem, i think you have took a very very true situation and worded it powerfully.

you have drew the readers attention from the start and kept the flow of the poem through out which keeps the readers attention.

i realte to this poem and you send out a clear message.

5/5, a really good job, hope to read mroe from you! xx

Omg that is wonderful!

Well well well.. this was fantastic.
She was happy,
At least that's what she led others to believe.
In reality she hurt,
But when she cried for help no one cared to see.

^^ Favourite stanza.

It finally became to much.
^^
Should be too.

Just some one who understood,
^^ ^
Someone should be joined.
And it is not necessary for a , at the end of a line in a poem. :)
There was a few commas at the end of lines, but im not going to put them all in here..

Overall a really great poem.. i really enjoyed reading it.
Keep up the great work :)

Did i just read ur profile right? how u said ur not much of a poet? Um...this was kind of ..... AMAZING!!! I loved it. It was so powerful. But sad. It was really excellent. 5/5 and nothing less. and added to my favs.