Comments : Remember Me, When...

  • 15 years ago

    by Kaitlyn Cabrera

    Absolutely Amazing

  • 15 years ago

    by Bethany

    This is an amazing poem! after your done reading it causes you to almost take a step back and soak it all in. 10/10 awesome! i can really relate.

  • 15 years ago

    by Nee

    Hello..
    I really liked the idea of this piece..it's so true for guyz, haha !
    I only have one small criticism
    "Tell her what we had never meant to last"
    I think you should put a comma after had..like
    "Tell her what we had, never meant to last"
    I thought it was kinda hard to understand.

    Even though the rhyming words were cliche..your idea strengthened the rhyme and it was very powerful.
    when I first read this poem, came to my mind that this might be a mother talking to her ex husband, telling him to never break their child's heart..but the ending wasn't convenient to my thought, lol

    But this was good, just don't push the rhyme too hard next time and it'll come out perfect :)
    Write on

  • 15 years ago

    by Meg

    This was an absolutley amazing poem, i felt my eyes tear up after reading it, i loved the flow of this, and it was really easy to relate to, really wonderful, keep writing :)

  • Simply expressed but deeply touchingg...
    tht was really perfect:)
    keep it up
    u r talented:)

  • 14 years ago

    by NEIL MUNRO

    Another realy good poem, i could hear you say every word. Going to add you to my favourites thats for sure