Comments : Last Goodbye

  • 12 years ago

    by isabel

    A poem i can easily relate to...
    nicely written...short, yet to the point...
    it flows quite well...
    the rhyme scheme is interesting...
    yet... on the first stanza...
    "dark" and "marks" don't fit very well...
    maybe change "marks" to the singular?

    despite that, it's really good...

    *isabel*

  • 12 years ago

    by El

    Great poem. Very emotional and i can realy relate.

    I agree with jenna about the last verse, a little weak but still gd =)

    The verse that starts 'The thunder rolls...' was fantastic - very deep

    Overall a great poem

    5/5
    =)

  • 12 years ago

    by coverd in darkness

    5/5, this is wonderfully written i found the 2nd and 3rd stanzas the strongest these took my breathe away especially
    "Razor held tight
    My blood is seeping
    these are my tears
    so no more weeping"
    This is so true you have written it so beautifully it shows the true emotion. The 3rd stanza wonderfully gives the reader a vision of the nights that hurt the most cold, lonely and gloomy. The final stanza i found a great way of finishing the poem i think the falling to the ground and picking up the hand to say goodbye is brilliant. Fantastic work, look forward to reading more.

  • I completly understand this poem ... WOW this is AMAZINGLY well written !!!

    WOW

  • 12 years ago

    by Jack Nightengale

    So dark and yet so sad
    This poem made me feel bad

    I really felt the words that were written.
    Very well expressed.

    5/5

  • 12 years ago

    by Martha

    You expressed the poem really good that when I read it, it relates... It is very dark indeed...yet when died was so sad....nice poem!