I enjoyed your work on this poem. Everything seemed in place and the message was clear; even a 10 year old could plainly see the message given here.

I only had 1 small thing that picked at me, the rhythym seemed a bit off between each stanza, though it could just be me....

All in all it was very good.

5/5

Vaughn

Unique! I loved the pattern you used.. the last word of the stanza was the last word of the first line of the next stanza.. :]
Well done. This poem was absolutely flawless, no flow issues at all.. in the second stanza I believed.. you had human kind or some word similar.. and I believe you need a hyphen there.. other than that.. you did fabulous.

5/5

Unique! I loved the pattern you used.. the last word of the stanza was the last word of the first line of the next stanza.. :]
Well done. This poem was absolutely flawless, no flow issues at all.. in the second stanza I believed.. you had human kind or some word similar.. and I believe you need a hyphen there.. other than that.. you did fabulous.

5/5

I really like this poem! Your rhyme sceme was perfect and the flow was nice and smooth.

The only thing that I could find wrong with this poem is a small gramatical error. In the first line of the last stanza "to" should be "too" but that's all I could find.
This is a very unique poem. You had a very good message to deliver in this, and did so very clearly. Hence the title. ^_^
Very good job. 5/5

Stefanie.

P.S. Thanks for the comment on mine. :)

Thank you I will edit

Very deep. This poem has a very strong and much needed message. I absolutely loved it. It flows, and it shows true emotion and power. One of the best poems I've read in awhile. Keep writing, you have a talent.

xo

A very powerful message expressed in this write. You begin with the purpose of life and end with that purpose and the message that is it better to give than to receive. Excellent work.

I really liked this poem it sends a very powerful message that people need to understand. Everything about this poem was great. I gave it a 5/5.

Great work.

Other than the small typo already pointed out, the flow was great and the meaning was evident. The rhyming style was unique.

I absolutely love the meaning of this poem and agree 100 percent. You've done a wonderful job with this piece. A few places I thought the flow was off, just a tad. Therefore I showed below how I thought you could fix it. Of course, my definition of 'flow' is a lot different than others. When I read a poem (silently and out loud) I expect to be able to read through it with ease, if the ease is faulted somewhere I note that as a mistake in the flow. The two lines below are places where I had to stop and rethink it, therefore rewrite it.

The effect and not the cause
[The effect, not the cause.]

Guided by heavenly force
[Guided by a heavenly force]

It is a wonderful poem...
It has a lovely beginning
"The purpose of life is to give"
(I always asked myself what the purpose of life was... :) )
and a very intersting pattern... the fact that every last word of a stanza is repeated in the first verse of the following stanza is very original...Also the fact that the beginning became also the end... it's really good...
It has also a very deep message...

well, it's absolutely a flawless poem =)
5/5
*isabel*

I really like this poem. I like how you stated that the purplse of life is to give. This is really inspiring!

This was a very lifting poem :). The meaning was nice too. "The purpose of life is to give". I agree with this 100%. Thanks for sharing this with me.

This poem was amazing. I really liked this one alot. =] and it is so true. The purpose of life is to give. Life is also full of choices but what makes yourself feel better and make others is to give out inspiration or even say a few words back to someone and it makes it alot easier.

keep it up.
keep on writing.
love always and forever.

I love the ending to this is put everything in its place. The Flow was perfect and the message was great. Not very many people in this world stop to realize why we are here on this earth. we get too caught up in our own worlds whether they be in sorrow or blinded by love or drama.
i like this very much 5/5

laura

Mr Nalley

You shone yourself here, bloody good poem......

Very strong and touching message. Reading this poem it makes me think of the purpose of my own life. Very well done as usual, 5/5, kel.