Great use of words...very different..Loved it!!

Sort of rocked my world.
thank you for such an amazinn poem, i loved it.

It decribes my last two weekends to a T.

I really liked this. there were parts where the flow was slightly startled

Define for us this hypocrisy,
I told you from the kitchen floor,
when you asked me who my God was,
if that made me my Father's who re.
^^^^The last line really threw it off.

You're the brightest colour crayon
in the box of monochromes and pastels,
^^^^ a perfect way to start the poem.
right there with those 2 lines caught the reader in to stay.

So sing us a song with your bubble gum eyes,
they stretch across this room and back.
Smile with your carousel lips
and tell us what we lack.
^^^Beautiful way to end.
Seriously you are a wizard with words that ooze with sarcasm and hurt.

A wonderful piece of work i can relate and thats what a good poem does. great job!

5/5

Funny way of telling someone about your weekend.. very well written. Great flow...had to giggle. haha.Have a nice week