Amazing. i love your way with words you have a great talent!! keep up the amazing work!! love this one. can sooo relate. 5/5 ~KM~

Ok i realy like it you have tallent.

This was so powerful and your wording was sooo well done. It was short, but really well written. Youve really outdone yourself with this write i think. And youre a fairly skilled rhymer. Nice work. 5/5

This is incredible, really! amazing!! :) thankyou for writing it, its great to find people talented!!
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Loved this poem. i liked how fast it was. yet you had to read again to just grasp it all. great job!!! 5/5

A fly rap, lol. good job, and thanks for the comment. lol. 5/5

This piece was good, though I did feel that it weakened as went on. The first two lines were great. A smile literally came across my face because I was so impressed by it. It was a great, unexpected rhyme, and the two lines just flowed perfectly. A really strong start. If you get the rest of this piece to the standard of the first two lines, this piece was be amazing.

Brad

I liked it a lot! Even for being short, it was really good...had a punch behind it!
Good job.
5/5

EmoBritboo

I find myself pondering this action everyday.
Awesome write. 5/5.