Everlasting Love

by Brittany   Dec 11, 2008


The space between my fingers and now filled
He healed my heart before it got killed

I see his soul through his eyes and smile
Every controversy we go through is worthwhile
The passion and delicacy of each kiss
Leaves behind it a lifetime of bliss

When my world is crashing all around me
And all the darkness of my life is surrounding
He walks out of the light of his heart
And reassures me of how we'll never be apart

And whenever I miss him, I close my eyes
I imagine his face, and I don't have to cry

I knew I loved him before I met him
The words "I love you" are anything but grim
Everyone who doubts us, what we soon will be
Will open their eyes to our destiny

No matter what anyone tries to say
No one can ever take him away
Just the feel of his touch is enough
To convey that everlasting love

This poem could never begin to describe
The undeniable feelings I have inside

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  • 17 years ago

    by RoseBlood

    I have some suggestions, I don't know will you find them useful.
    In the first line, you give a great beggining of the poem.But, I think that you could change one word:
    "The space between my fingers and now filled"-I think that instead of "and" you could put "is"I think it would sound better that way.
    "When my world is falling
    And my name he is calling"-and here, istead of "and"you could put something like"it is my name he's calling"or you don't even have to put anything there and it would be
    "my name he is calling"
    and I think it would sound better.
    I'm at pitty because I can't give you any suggestion how to continue the poem, I have never been in a happy relationship.
    But, still, Would you PM me when you finish it?I would really like to read it and see how it would end.
    Oh, and I almost forgot, the poem is very good, and the words flew nicely, and I'm already giving you a 5.
    Keep it up.
    Carla

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