Tragic is the word that comes to mind as I read this and it is tragic. We all make bad decisions in life but we must learn from them and not take our lives because of them. Good job on this and I hope others will learn from it.

Creative poem ; nice work

Wow, that was really eye opening. i thought you did a great job on this.

the title was very simple and eye catching. you kept the flow up through out the poem and i liked your style of language use aswell i think that worked really well. the poem seemed to flow fast which relates to how it must have been for all that to happen to the girl, time must have flew by.

this is a very powerful poem, keep it up x

This is amazing and it really is sad to think that some people really do deal with their problems in a way like that but my cousins girlfriend tried to kill of their first kid with drugs and drinking but luckily he turned out ok

Tragic and really well written too.
I know there are so many millions of girls all over the world getting knocked up and end up dead or being a teen mum. Good write:)

Take care,

5/5 Ingrid

Wow, this sure was intense. It was so descriptive! Awesome job. You described the stages that the girl went through very well.. the first one being, of course with the guy, and then the, finding out she was pregnant, then it was the denial, then it was the beatings, then the embarrassment.. then finally.. the death. It kept me reading right till the end and i was interested the whole way through. It was incredibly sad, but you wrote about an issue that is commonly faced in todays society, extremely well.
Awesome job :]
5/5

Oh my gosh. An amazing poem though really really depressing. I have felt this, or thought so at least. Great writing, amazing imagery, more amazing story. I could just see it popping out of my head and flashing beneath my eyelids. Perfect. 5/5