Wow, what a beautiful, yet heartbreaking poem. i agree with above comments, i absolutely loved the comparison of burning candles to your love.. it was fantastic and very unique.
i loved your ending also, it was a very strong finish.. awesome job.
How touching and heartfelt your words are, emotion is just pouring out of this piece, and your comparisons are outstanding. Writers like you that have a different style, orginality and uniqueness, are a joy to have around and reading your poems really is a treasure for me. This piece was straight from your heart, and took me away. Great work! Keep writing, always and forever. 5/5 from me, take care...
"Tell me do you want my love to remain always
I'll sacrifice my life for the rest of your days
I will become your candle and light the way
I will be here for you, be it night or day"
I like how you add the love with the sacrifice that seems to be lacking in relationships today. The willingness to go to the end of the earth and do anything and everything for your loved ones. Amazingly written, even more amazing idea, and perfect feelings behind it. 5/5