A very in depth piece you have here. I quite liked the title, because it was something different that actually worked brilliantly at the end of the poem. I really liked your depictions of how sorrow takes it's effect toward one's soul, and how over time the apathy within them becomes more and more condensed and difficult to expel.

Very descriptive and well written. The only thing that threw me off when I read the poem was the use of the word "dirty" twice in the beginning. Not a very big deal though, because I thought the vast majority of the poem was wonderful.

Excellent work.

I loved this...maybe I'm weird, i love it