Brilliant title, very unique and catches my eye....

"Attracted by a wounded abyss of tears
I let my soul bleed for a thousand years
My body was tied up and left in the ground
"My love, there's always beauty in the breakdown""

Wonderful opening, the rhyming is excellent and your descriptions get me into this poem.

"A heartless apathy... No energy to run...
I try to raise my head and look into the sun
A stream of light... The intensity of a flame...
Echoes of sadness... Nightingales, they became..."

Beautiful, the wording is stunning and made me speechless.

"The twisted sorrow breaks into space
While my life is awaken by your face
Without a balance, the world would drown
"My love, there's always beauty in the breakdown""

Second line: "awaken" should be "awakened".
Also, I like how you repeated that line "My love, there's always beauty in the breakdown", really you should be very proud of yourself, this is extremely stunning!

"I fell into the night... My sweet angel catched me...
Your laugh is my lullaby... Only you I long to see...
You whisper... I feel lost in the beauty of your heart
"My love... I will never let you fall apart...""

First line: "catched" should be "caught".
These lines:"Your laugh is my lullaby", I mean wowie! Such sweet heartfelt words....

Overall, 5/5, wish I could rate more. This piece was so indepth, the rhyming was flawless, the emotions perfectly portrayed, this has to be one of the greatest love poems ever, you have immense talent, keep it up!

Thanks for the lines on grammar... :))

Attracted by a wounded abyss of tears
I let my soul bleed for a thousand years
My body was tied up and left in the ground
"My love, there's always beauty in the breakdown"

^^ The first line really caught me, the imagery here is great. The bleeding soul creates some powerful emotions in the reader, some awesome imagery and it also hooks the reader. The mysterious voice we hear adds some suspense to the poem, and entices the reader to carry on. Great stanza :D

A heartless apathy... No energy to run...
I try to raise my head and look into the sun
A stream of light... The intensity of a flame...
Echoes of sadness... Nightingales, they became...

^^ I'm not entirely sure about why the ... things (can't remember the name) are in here but if you like them then that's all that matters. The second and third line make sense together but the rest don't have a running link between them. However, there is some great imagery here and it makes the reader empathise. This could do with a little bit of work in my opinion.

The twisted sorrow breaks into space
While my life is awakened by your face
Without a balance, the world would drown
"My love, there's always beauty in the breakdown"

^^ This stanza makes better sense to me. It shows the reader the sorrows of break up, and how it meant everything as 'the world' is mentioned, not just 'my world'. I like the idea of life being awakened, very powerful. The speech bit at the end sounds a bit too long and therefore slightly misfitting. All in all, good :)

I fell into the night... My sweet angel caught me...
Your laugh is my lullaby... Only you I long to see...
You whisper... I feel lost in the beauty of your heart
"My love... I will never let you fall apart..."

^^ This is a great finishing stanza. Again, I think that a poet of your talent should be able to use a better punctuation soloution to those '...' things. However, the imagery is superb and I love the slight twist with how the mysterious voice returns, like a hypocrite. Great ending :D

Overall, a fantastic poem with some amazing imagery and beautifully flawless rhyme scheme: it appears to be effortless, just falling into place, which is superb. You have some great talent, you should definately feature this as it is worth 5/5!

Keep writing,
Em :)

Wow ur poem really blew me away.You managed to craft a beautiiful but yet a sad poem.You're very creative with your words and you managed to pen down your wild imagination.Absolutely fantastic
All the best for your contest

Excellent Job
5/5 from me

Attracted by a wounded abyss of tears
I let my soul bleed for a thousand years
My body was tied up and left in the ground
"My love, there's always beauty in the breakdown"
^^aww...so sad seriously! you did such an amazing job of expressing pain in a non cliche way the opening was so powerful! it makes me so excited to see what the rest of the poem will be!! by the way LOVE the title ; )

A heartless apathy... No energy to run...
I try to raise my head and look into the sun
A stream of light... The intensity of a flame...
Echoes of sadness... Nightingales, they became...
^^ok so here you really show how broken down you are how you have so little strength left and that every thing is blurry and can't hold your attention i think the readers will really be able to relate here they will be able to think of a time they have felt this way you are relating to us which is so important! It keep us involved with your words i pictured this stanza in my mind it was beautifully sad

The twisted sorrow breaks into space
While my life is awakened by your face
Without a balance, the world would drown
"My love, there's always beauty in the breakdown"
^^ going back to something that was in the poem before is so great! it helps bring the poem together and seem like a piece in and of itself! Great wording here this was my favorite stanza it took the pain to another unbearable level...i can relate and it sucks but you put into words what i cant! great job!

I fell into the night... My sweet angel caught me...
Your laugh is my lullaby... Only you I long to see...
You whisper... I feel lost in the beauty of your heart
"My love... I will never let you fall apart..."
^^ ah! you make your words so powerful! you gave me goosebumps : ) which is a good thing! maybe this is my favorite stanza? idk i can't decide you beautifully constructed this!

So i can't complain about one thing here! i couldn't find any grammar mistakes or wording i would change. the flow was perfect and the structure flawless! i think you really got your message across in a powerful and impactful way
great job! 5/5

Wow, this is so pretty.
"I try to raise my head and look into the sun.
A stream of light...The intensity of a flame.
That part is so beautiful to me. This poem is very well-worded and overall very great. Keep it up!

AMAZING!!! You are very creative with your words! "My love, there's always beauty in the breakdown." Its a very beautiful poem! Very catchy title! 5/5! Keep up the good work! *jennifer*

Nice i liked it

Wow i love this poem it is truly amazing the rythem is so smooth and flowing you could dance to it the emotion was intense the structure is very well laid out within the poem i loved the ending it was a perfect way to finish it

well done

Wow. Wow. Wow. Wow. Amazing. I absolutely LOVE this. It's so... wonderful. 5/5, this is going in my favorites.