Past should in the past

by STEPHANiiE   Dec 25, 2008


You was the on that made me happy

you was the one that made me sad

the only one that can never make me mad

you completed me

then you broke me in half

now your thinking we should give it

a second chance

but i think the past should stay in the past

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  • 15 years ago

    by Tripp

    You show definite potential, however to be honest, - as your profile requested - your grammar/spelling leaves a lot to be desired. Your misuse of verbs, in particular.

    All poetry is good. However you could turn this from a "good" poem into a "great" poem if you just worked on your grammar and organization.

    Bear that in mind with all poetry. You remind me a lot of myself when I first began writing...all you need is a little direction. If you want, check out some of my stuff. Simple organization is all you really need.

    Keep up the good work. 4/5

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