Omg.. :/ im literally speechless i dont know what to say. Ok, sorry if this doesnt make sense but your poem totally blew me away.
That was such a sad ending! It brought me to tears... one line can change the whole poem so quickly. That was a fantastic.. great write.
When you wrote about waiting for her, i actually felt sorry for the guy, because the way you wrote it really made me feel the love he felt for her..
And then when she turned up.. it was the sweetest thing ever. One of the sweetest bits in a poem i have ever read.
And then.. that last stanza.. wow it shocked me.. i was definitely not expecting that. It really did make me sad.. how he was just remembering the good times at her grave.. wow that really.. wow. So good.

The flow and rhyme was very good and it really added to the overall greatness of the poem..
Sorry.. im soo.. blown away. that was a fantastic poem. i think one of my favourites from you.
definitely 5/5

The ending was a shock. The first five verses were so joyful and happy, then the last verse is like a punch in the gut and sad. Very well written.

My dear Grant you are just the best. Fill the heart with happiness of love then flood it with sorrow..Good Job ^-^

Grant,

This poem is really a story...the saddest ever of a young man ready to make her his own and then she dies on him...I love how you kept the suspension there right until the last stanza. It is a good story and I have witnessed something very much like this in real life when I was a small girl. Reading your words brought all those memories back again.
A very good come back:)

*hugs*

5/5 Ingrid

Such a beautiful piece, both in verse and meaning. sad and wounderful; whata true gift to the reader 5/5

Wow!! i'm so speechless. this poem was simply amazing, a little twist you added o it made it even better, a poem i just wanted to keep reading and couldnt stop. your words took my breath away. a deep and pure poem, loved it. job well done. 5/5.

-Ashlei.

What a heartbreaking poem.
Excellent job!
Take care
Cindy

That was as beautiful as the rest of your poems. The descriptions were vivid, I think my favorite line was "A single swirling leaf on a lemon scented breeze." And the ending was... wow.
5/5