Comments : Just Listen

  • 15 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    Breathtaking love poem that clearly shows how you truly feel.

    "My heart empty
    Everlasting words cut short
    My eyes washed out
    Tears left permanent trail"

    Good descriptions, giving me visuals at what's happening. Also for the fourth line, to me it would sound better if you added an "s" at the end of "trail".

    "My soul searching
    Happiness beyond reach
    My arms empty
    Your smell still lingers"

    Good wording, this piece captured my heart and soul and drew me in.

    "Open up your heart
    Open up your eyes
    Open up your soul
    And guide me to your arms
    Baby just listen"

    I love how you are just wanting your love to come to you.

    "My heart yearns for you
    My eyes desire you
    My soul incomplete without you
    My empty arms calling you"

    Well-expressed thoughts, this is clearly straight from your heart. Showing how much this person means in your life and how much you need them.

    "Baby just listen
    You know its true
    Give in to your feelings
    I belong to you"

    Nice ending, a meaningful love poem. 5/5 from me, take care and keep up the good work!