This is...sort of typical for the suicide-type of writing. It's well written, has a pretty good flow. There are some rough spots.
The punctuation. Commas are pauses, and I feel there are too many pauses in this poem.
Something else came to my attention, your lines go short and then long, it sort of halts the flow a little.
I would rearrange some of the wording, to make it more lock-in tight.
Overall, a pretty good poem.
I thought it was a very good poem, great job=]
It may be a typical topic to write about as the person above said yet I feel you wrote the piece extremly well ^^ Just use capps on all your ''i's'' (I) and the poem will be even better