This is...sort of typical for the suicide-type of writing. It's well written, has a pretty good flow. There are some rough spots.
One is
The punctuation. Commas are pauses, and I feel there are too many pauses in this poem.
Something else came to my attention, your lines go short and then long, it sort of halts the flow a little.
I would rearrange some of the wording, to make it more lock-in tight.
Overall, a pretty good poem.

I thought it was a very good poem, great job=]
It may be a typical topic to write about as the person above said yet I feel you wrote the piece extremly well ^^ Just use capps on all your ''i's'' (I) and the poem will be even better

Nice. i like the poem from the strat to the finish. Well sometimes we do fall back to our past makes us weak and confused.

my eyes staring at the ground,
i wipe away my tear stained cheeks,
i pour the contents of the bottle in my hand,
one by one i swallow til i can barely stand.

- this stanza really stood out for me I like how you displayed how you wasted ur life away by turning to drinking for solace.

Overall you have done a wonderful job in crafting this poem

5/5 from me

Very dark, and emotional piece, I could feel what you were feeling, and that's something a lot of poetry on here cannot make me do, is feel. Great job. 5/5

Sincerely,
Elizabeth (Ellie) <3

Another good one, mista kyle.
i liked the pattern of rhyme.
:] good job.
smile for me, k?

Really liked this
I miss reading your poetry
You are such the poet
hun!
Love you and keep up the awesome
Writing!!5/5

Emotional , and well written . When you do rhyming poems you should try and create a rhyme pattern .