Love , god and friends..seem to make up a very good name , oh and the occasional smile of course. this poem was heartfelt ..nice

HS

"Nothing special about the name I wear,
if you're excluding my family
every breath I take
The dog I feed each day,
the way I look at life."

^^ I'm not to sure about this..having read some of your other work I feel you can do better simply because I know you're capable of stronger openings and I found this one to be a little weak.

"Born and raised a christian,
that's all I'll ever be
God's won my heart a million times,
and you can multiply that by three."

^^ I liked this, it shows that you're not afraid to show who you are to me, what I wasn't to keen on was that the first stanza has no rhyme and then this one does, it threw the flow a little for me.

"Fruitful in my earnings,
if earnings were the love I've received
for family is all that
I shall ever need

Friends have taught me all about
this life we live turned upside down
Never strayed too far from home
where every breath I breathe is followed by a crown"

^^ My favourite stanzas of the piece, to me they show the little things that make life worthwhile, and you did a wonderful job at portraying that here.

"She never fails the cuteness test
putting a smile on my face each day,
I adore the christmas gift given to me,
my wonderful dog Daisy May"

^^This part made me smile, I can understand where you're coming from being an animal lover myself, and having the most cutest dog in the woorld (in my opinion lol) and again I like how you're portraying the smaller things, the things that make life beautiful.

"The sky my future
the soil my shame
Everything that's referred to,
is everything that makes my name "

^^ I really like this closing, in fact I liked the whole piece, I found it ot be original and unique in concept and made for a refreshing read.

Another really good poem, again I can't find anything that could be improved.

The sky my future
the soil my shame
Everything that's referred to,
is everything that makes my name

This is my favourite stanza the first two lines add a depth to this poem that just doesn't seem to come from a novice.

All in all, I like the topic. It seems random from stanza to stanza, but it's captivating because it sound so honest and like it's coming straight from the heart. Personally, I prefer more metaphorical poetry, but this one makes a nice read, too.

Overall, everything portrayed from the first to the last line is well put; narration of this type can't always capture the reader's interests, but you managed to pull it off.
It's not one of my favorites from you, because the flow is shaky at the times and some lines [in my opinion] could use metaphors, but it's refreshing.