This is one of my fav poems that I have so far read, great work.

Ooo ok this one gave me the chills i really love this one i can feel that you really mean this i love the wording in it excellent

I am standing at the mountain top
Thinking my life has reached its end
The fear of dying is inside of me
But I cannot go on playing pretend

^WOW once again u did an amazing job of bring the reader to keep on readin.
Many Can relate to this i surly can. goin with our lives pretendin we are okay wen realie we need sumone to hold us tight tight to not break dwn and fall.

My hand is shaking while I am writing this
The wind is blowing through my hair
Again and again I keep playing in my thoughts
The memory where you turn and walk away

^bery imagie. i coudl see you sitin dwn while the wind blow n u lost in ur thoughts. i wouldnt change a word here.

I have been fighting the pain for so long
But it does not want to go
He is going to understand how much I loved him
Soon, when my blood starts to flow

^oh wow. this was a deep, dark words u wrte here. show him u loved him by showing him ur blood. gave me a small shiver through my back.

The fear inside me is getting stronger
And it makes my knees fall to the ground
But this is something I have to do
Though I know I am disappointing everyone

^very sad, also touching. i feel disappointing sumone is the worst feelin in the word expect for sumthing else. like i would say once again u have your way with words.

I wish there was an easier way to do this
Like falling asleep and not waking up
Tears start rolling down my cheeks
As I hear my friends running towards me begging me to stop

^sumtime just sayin sumtimes the easy way out is not always easy to do.

I hope that you are happy now
You crushed my soul and took my heart
And instead of letting me heal
You kept tearing my world apart

^dark once again. anger and hate i felt here. like i felt you were screamin, yelling at him for what he has done to you.

So when you read this message you will understand why
I am now giving you a Painful Goodbye

^i wouldnt have ended any other way. i realie loved this one. another piece your wrote wonderfulie. please do keep it up!
5/5

TaKe CaRe,
Frenchy