A big amen to that, dear Kelleyana:)
Beautifully worded plea for peace on earth!
I truly hope we will see the light befrore we completely self destruct:/

Je t'embrasse

5/5 Ingrid

"Stop destruction
Call for peace
Come together
One'

^^ beautifull and very motivating... I hope people start paying heed to these simple words... that could change the fate of many...

wonderfully and cleverly penned...
Corps== corpse I guess

I am completely amazed, this is a fantastic write. I really loved the ending, the last two lines hit hard. They were very cleverly written. Its really sad when our worst enemies are the people who surround us.. this is not how the world should be.. we should not be seperated and fighting because of religion and everything else.. we have enough that we have to deal with.
Your poem was truly amazing.. i really enjoyed it. It should be read by many others as it screams the truth.
Unpleasant sounds vibrates the ground
^^
just one thing, i would probably change it to:
Unpleasant sound vibrates the ground OR
Unpleasant sounds vibrate the ground.

Other than that, a fantastic write.
Definitely 5/5

This poem was really good at the beginning and it hit home at several parts..
the reason why I gave it 4/5 is..look at these lines

Christian, Jew and muslim, peace
Expand it to Palestine
No derive from life
Stop destruction
Call for peace
Come together
One

these went kinda off the piece..I mean your wording was great and everything and then at a sudden point you kinda seemed like you're losing it.
they weren't as powerful as the others.

Back to the others..I shall congratulate you for writing the first part..you really did success in making it flawless without any defect.
"Unpleasant sounds vibrates the ground"
This line gave me chills..it was the most amazing line in the piece..loved it and loved the deep expressed meaning in it.
Double etheree is one of my fave types ever..you came up with a great piece =)

Very well done friend!
Write on xx

Kel this is another amazing piece from you .I like the subject that you have explore. It sux to hear of all these on going war...fighting over land but hatred went over to religion.

Btw take note

Call for peace
Come together
One

^^^i tot it should be 3,2,1? 'come together' is 4 syallble...you might wanna rephase tt

But other than that, i like the content of it. you have certainly pulled this off

Excellent Job
5/5

Amen 5/5

It all comes together like the word should
5>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>

Good work but just so you know one of the 6 is missing

"Fears
Who cares?
Body trembles
slaughtering war
Innocent pays the price
Corpse lying without lives
Unpleasant sounds vibrates the ground
So called brave men feeling no sense of guilt
Will war resolve underlying issue?"
-you have painted the images so vividly, it's like I can see them in front of me. the imagery is powerful and yet you have done it well though you have been unconscious on the form

"Only the will power of negotiation
There might be some hopes for cessation
Rivers of blood without regrets
Christian, Jew and muslim, peace
Expand it to Palestine
No derive from life
Stop destruction
Call for peace
become
One"
-you have really extracted a really good perspective here, specifically in the current situation of our land, our lives where peace abandoned our hearts, we can only be one I think if an alien invasion will be declared where all nations would come hand in hand together.

*interesting Write*

=5/5=

Bu the way you have not stated what form of poetry you made. . please specify if that doesn't bother. . I think that's *DIMINISHED HEXAREVERSE* i think I have done this kind of poem.

I can relate the this poem very well.

Makes me wish I had more time to focus on the things that's important to me, very enjoyable. You're work is a craft!