Crazy lil thing called love

by XxRed RougexXKoRn   Jan 14, 2009


It's a lil thing that we call love
that jus makes me feel like a dove
soaring across the sky
only thinking of one guy

waiting for his arrival
knowing he is the only survival
and I bet
we can't repeat that day we met

looking into each others eyes
knowing that there has no lies
for the love we give each other
and there could be no other

for this feeling we have now
people have to bow
cuz its so true
and people have no clue

on jus what to expect
cuz they can't reflect
on their own life and what it is
cuz it's jus like a big quiz

because everyone says their in love
but it's no true love
and omg it's so fun
when you know you have the special one

jus knowing
everything is flowing
like the ocean
I guess it's llike a potion

like one minute your life can be a disaster
then the next it could feel like your the headmaster
of the world cuz nothing could go wrong
and you feel like you belong

and you really know when it's true
when no one can get between you two
but you really know your ment to be together
when you last forever <3

***I jus wrote this out of boredom cuz i don't really believe in love jus liking someone a lot ( i also believe that you can last forever)so there for it is about someone ;)****

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  • 15 years ago

    by Cotton Candy Clouds

    Just a couple pointers that people have given me that really helped my writing evolve.
    1) add punctuation/capitalization of words it helps the appearance of the poem it seems more professional and official cleaned up basically : )
    2) don't just go for rhyme sometimes it ruins the emotion don't get me wrong i thought this was a great poem! i just think some lines were there because they rhymed. Maybe jot down what you're really feeling than take that deep and heart felt emotion and toy with it to make it a poem ((if that makes sense !))
    3) keep the lines around the same length. It will really help the flow! and the reader to stay on track

    I think this poem has a lot of potential. You have great imagery and obviously emotion : ) Just maybe try for less filler words and the forced rhyme. Not all poems rhyme! some are just free flowing

    I honestly do think you did a great job that's why im giving you a 5/5

  • 15 years ago

    by Tiiffaanyy

    Ayee..!
    Awwh this one is so sweet and so great!
    i can't believe you won't it Lol jk :P
    Great Job! 5/5 for sure!

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