First off, the form wasn't easy to read for me so I would separte parts and make them stanzas, like four or six lines in each stanza. And also I see you had a bit of punctuation, but I think you could add a lot more, it was a bit confusing to read and the flow was off because you didn't have punctuation.

Near the end of the poem, you spelled "gaurantee" wrong, so change that...

"I'm shivering
Wasting energy on these hopes
That maybe it wasn't so bad, romance
It just went awry and now we've paid
The dues I owe you, i can't explain"

Last line: "i" should be "I".
I love your wording here, very nice.

Overall 4/5, I liked all of the emotions and feelings in this piece, but I do think the structure was a bit off. Take care...