I LOVE it

Well when youv'e studied old english for a quite a while you appreciate when somebody produces a poem which has been worded in such a way. I thought it was very good and the flow worked quite well, maybe you could change the structure just a little for a smoother flow but to be honest its not imperritive you do so as this is already a very good job.

Heartfelt emotions were running through this piece, and I greatly enjoyed it especially the alliteration. Very touching and moving, this piece was very deep and not cliche at all. 5/5 from me, take care :)

"Hearts held high,
Only omniscient of obituaries
Kisses kept
Through the thoughts
Except exempt extraordinaries"

^^This is beautiful..the imagery you portray in this stanza creates such vivid images for me as the reader, and the emotion and depth pulls on the heartstrings, leading me right into the piece.

"Hands held higher,
Standing strong, so surreal
With wisdom
Caring, Caressing
Kneel.

Looking limp,
Being broken
Wishes woven
Through tears, thus this token
Seconds slipping, Seeing it soak in."

^^Favourite part of the poem, simply because you switch from something so strong, filled with determination to something sad and filled with hopelessness, and it makes for a powerful transistion.

"Embrace, Engage
Not a single war to wage.
Love a battle, I will never have to brave,
It's your hand and my love that I want to save,

Forever.
And always
Til death do us part.. "

What a beautiful way to end this piece, the emotion and depth shine through the written words and make for beautiful reading.

I really liked the alliteration used throughout and found the flow to be flawless.

Beautiful work.

First off, this poem caught my attention right off the bat, simply by word choice.

"Hearts held high,
Only omniscient of obituaries
Kisses kept
Through the thoughts
Except exempt extraordinaries"

These are powerful words, and how and where you put them makes them even more powerful.

"Hands held higher,
Standing strong, so surreal
With wisdom
Caring, Caressing
Kneel."

Simply the structure of this stanza is amazing. *Caring, Caressing, Kneel* It shows much in just 3 words, it was a risky move to take, but you pulled it off wonderfully.

"Looking limp,
Being broken
Wishes woven
Through tears, thus this token
Seconds slipping, Seeing it soak in.

Embrace, Engage
Not a single war to wage.
Love a battle, I will never have to brave,
It's your hand and my love that I want to save,"

These 2 stanzas are very amazing. The simple structure of this puts meaning into the whole poem. I like the time frame andthe woring you used to capture the moment *seconds slipping*. That was very good.

"Forever.
And always
Til death do us part.. "

These words have been spoken so much, but with the stanzas before this it makes the reader really look into this short, but simple phrase. I love the way you ended it.

One of the most beautiful poems, i've ever read. Beautiful structure, word choice, and feeling.

Most definitly
5/5

Hearts held high,
Only omniscient of obituaries
Kisses kept
Through the thoughts
Except exempt extraordinaries

^^ I love how you unfurl your poem
you have used an excellent choices
of words to create the intensity of this poem

Hands held higher,
Standing strong, so surreal
With wisdom
Caring, Caressing
Kneel.

^^ The way interprete this is that the lover
is at the gravyard kneeling in grieve at
his tombstone

Looking limp,
Being broken
Wishes woven
Through tears, thus this token
Seconds slipping, Seeing it soak in.

^^ Again here it goes indepth into the grieve
of how the protagonist is feeling

Embrace, Engage
Not a single war to wage.
Love a battle, I will never have to brave,
It's your hand and my love that I want to save,

^^ Ok here the way i interprete is that, they no longer
have anymore arguement to argue about and if the protagonist could turn back time, all she wants is to save him

Forever.
And always
Til death do us part..

^^ Ok well this is certainly a great way to end it
but then again it kindda contradicts with my interpretationbut then agian i like the feel that you have created for the poem

Overall with little words you have certainly a great imaginationto pull off a poem like this

Excellent Job
5/5

I'm not gonna lie, this was a very confusing poem for me haha. I was just thinking so many things at the same time that I was beginning to weave them together to form a nonsensical guess.

Anyway, I think this poem is about how love is battle that shouldn't be fought for, because in the end the real love shows. That's my guess, and I took that from:

"Hearts held high,
Only omniscient of obituaries"

and

"Not a single war to wage.
Love a battle, I will never have to brave,"

I think the way you wrote it was very interesting, how you can take the words very bluntly on the surface, but when you really look deep you'll find a much richer meaning.

5/5 - It was a good write:)

"Hearts held high,
Only omniscient of obituaries
Kisses kept
Through the thoughts
Except exempt extraordinaries"

^^ loved the word choice... I felt the words here were more powerful than the emotions behind ... loved the last line ... again because of your word play

"Hands held higher,
Standing strong, so surreal
With wisdom
Caring, Caressing
Kneel."

^^ this stanza has a lot more emotions ... has soft touch to it... but a strong feeling of never letting go ...

"Embrace, Engage
Not a single war to wage.
Love a battle, I will never have to brave,
It's your hand and my love that I want to save,"

^^ Love is indeed a battle... but no one loose and noone wins ... loved the last line ... it has so much love in...

"Forever.
And always
Til death do us part."

^^I found these lines very touching ... beautifully indeed ... to me it didnt feel like an addition :)

wonderful write...

Excellently written, I loved your choice of words, for this poem portraied a messege within which is heartfelt and personal to many, good Job! I'm sure many can relate.

The flow and the structure was outstanding in my opinion, and you did an excellent job in portraying emotions in such a different way than I usually see, which I really liked, made this poem unique in it's own.

Peace, Joe