Very clever write, Its a good poem
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The flow works really and I enjoyed reading it!

Metaphorically this could be taken as disillusioned words like bullets bark
While human gods aim for their mark and to me what could be more flattering to a master poet as Bob Dylan that you would discover this as he probably reworded
Many profound metaphorical observations

Very well written
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I've read a few of your poems now
and what I've realised about your work
Is you have an amazing talent for creating poems that have brilliant creative flow

This poem is no different
It is also filled with some great metaphors
Most importantly
it meant something to me

Great poem, you really are a very talented writer

5/5

This is an amazing write, very blunt but very to the point. Its flow is a cutesy rhyme that we've had swimming in our head, and you've put it down on paper.

5/5 - I've read other poems of yours, but this is by far my favorite:)

Good poem. I believe you have lots of emotion in it. I just feel the flow is off on the second and last stanzas, you seem to force the flow a little. Also, "and ruin a perfect past" doesn't seem to make sense, but that might be just me. Overall, good.

Peace and prosperity,

(RKD)

I have added this to my favorite poems, if you don't mind. This poem is the first to be on my Favorites List. I loved the way it flow, I loved the everything of it.
I thought it was a real clever way of writing it. I give you a 5/5 for this beautiful write.

Great poem. i very much like how it flowed. and how u got your point across. great poem 5/5
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Morgan :):):):)

This is amazing :-) and I really like this it really made me laugh because sometimes I feel that way.. But I truely like this
5/5

Very good, original