Kiss

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I enjoyed the read right to the last verse and then there is something that is off. It just does not flow as well as the rest to me.

With very little words you have managed to capture the emotions that you have for the person tt u love. I like the idea you infuse the force of nature and also the sound of everyday things into this poem , I think it's very original.

I let go of everything around me.

^^ This was a great was to end the poem. When you love someone so much, you wouldn't wanna think at anything else except bout tt person

Excellent Job
5/5

Wow! i enjoyed reading this one.. 4/5