Comments : Protection

  • 15 years ago

    by Faithless

    Again with little words you have crafted a beautiful piece, I like the idea that you use only the necessary words to bring across ur message. Certainly u have done a great job on tt and also on the rhyme

    Take your thrown
    ^^^ btw here i think u mean throne instaed or thrown???

    Well overall i really enjoyed reading it.Keep it up 5/5

  • 15 years ago

    by ChrisT

    Well written i like the fact youre straight to the point just say it as it is what you think

  • 15 years ago

    by Mister 47

    Ok fisrt :

    i loved the flow in this poem except the last stanza it seem a bit off on the flow side ,
    my best lines are the 2 first lines.

    screaming till you break the sound is a very unique metaphore i loved it .

    learning no lesson , that is our everyday life katie . if only we learn half the lessons we will be much better.

    protecting your heart ,? that never work in real life katie , that is the only part in our body , no matter how much we try this wont be ful proof , human kind is used to break this heart . and get over it and move on ,

    that is how life work.

    i enjoyed reading this poem indeed,

    you have my vote
    5/5