The structure of this poem could use a little work...instead of writing it out like that you could separate your lines into different stanzas, that would help alot, and be better to understand.

You was able to choose a fantastic title, it went along with your writing and most of the time thats hard to do for some people.

It expresses alot of emotions and allows readers to know exactly how you felt when you wrote this.

Good job and keep up the wonderful work

5/5