Solution

by Marcus   Feb 3, 2009


*I tried to switch my writing style up with this one

Living in solitude with a vacant heart
Lacking any knowledge of this thing called love
Misery lingering as if it would never depart
Strange thoughts that my mind remained full of

A whirlwind of emotion led to an entangled soul
No sensible solution seemed to be in existence
Life was in a downward spiral out of control
And then appeared the one who made a difference

Through tender love, affection, and genuine concern
With a flawless smile, heavenly complexion, and comprehending eyes
In possession of a gentle heart that I aspire to earn
She appeared in my life as a remarkable surprise

Capturing my heart like a thief in the midst of the night
Remaining undetected as she made a move on me so fleetly
She gently holds me, captivating me, showing me delight
I love her with all my heart, yet I do it discreetly

Things that once brought me mental pollution
Stress, pain, struggles, and heartbreak
Seemed to have no answer but she's the solution
In the depth of my problems she altered my fate

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  • 15 years ago

    by Hawaiian Chick

    I can't get over how brilliant all of your poems are! Especially this one! I felt the emotions buried with each word. Fantastic job! It was beautiful!

  • 15 years ago

    by Cantchangeme

    Brilliant poem, Loved the deep meaning to it and it was written beautifully. With an outstanding word choice and good rhyming style.

    Really enjoyed reading it

    5

  • 15 years ago

    by Hawaiian Chick

    I loved it!!! The writing style is amazing and I loved all of your discriptive words. Also, awesome job at displaying your emotion. Great job!

  • 15 years ago

    by Nobodys Hero

    I really like this poem it's beautifully written! Really great job =]
    The flow works really well and the rhyming was consistant. I also thought your choice of wording added more depth.

  • 15 years ago

    by Hollymariee

    I think it's awesome that you chose to try a different style , that's really brave of you . And you did a really good job on top of that ! The rhymes are really good , and the message is clear .. A little work to be done on the flow though .

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