.. this seems incomplete at the end .. LIke it could really keep going . but the idea really is fantastic . it really overwhelmed me because i could relate to it so much :( .

Temps,

First things first *holds to you tightly and shares your emotional load*

Okay then, now lets take a look at this poem..

Title:
It may seem quite a simple title, but it is like a tip of an iceberg. To finally reach the point of no return, where you have to let go symbolises the shear scale of height achieved; each step notched, even gouged into your heart, so to let go now is to leave that mountain that you have fought to save, fought to concur, so now here you choose to fly instead of fall. It may not seem like flying but maybe free-falling would be a better term?

Stanza 1:
Written in the second tense, it is like writing in the first would be too potent, too raw, and too real. I understand, I really do!
I notice that you start with the most intense emotion felt, it is like it just had to flow out of you and onto the screen; like a release from the boiling pot of tears. Despite the intense heat, this is endured further for the sake of hope; hope that a day will make all the difference. Hope is after all what gives us the strength to climb. With nothing else to lose our heroine offers her friendship, which like her love is unconditional and given freely.

Stanza 2:
Desperation of her will to cling to the man who has been her everything, inspired so much her to become more, to stand tall and walk proudly. Surely friendship has been earned here, right? Damn right, so through her tears her pledge is to keep you safe even though she cries for her now friend to be the one whose arms she shelters in.

Stanza 3:
I like how you have expressed your words of emotional distress through worded tears, very good! A strong message in this last stanza, it tells him that she needs his connection, requires it to keep her safe, keep her alive. Friendship maybe only second best for her, but she will would rather have that than have nothing at all.

Temps, you were right when you said this was a true write. Its truth screams out its honesty and so each word has tears soaked into them, your tears, each one acutely real.

((hugs)) My door is always open.

Michael

Tempsy, let me start with the title : letting go. ...

once , an old chinese wise man told me and i stil hold it in my heart .. in china they say yesterday is history , tomrow is yet to be writen , and today is a GIFT , that is why it is called PRESENT .

sometimes we live in the past , and forget about today . torturing your self like this , is not going to make things straight or make the clock turn back ..

you refered your self as SHE in your poem , who is she?
you or somone you lost in your past ? your words jsut enter the sadenss to my heart, that girl that have such a tender heart and smile .. where is SHE now? .. still see her in your miror?..

the world is a very cold place tempsy , and he miss your warm smile..

you wanted one more chance.. to be his friend.. and you did not ask for yourself but to confort him , .. how can somone give soo much? you need to have somethings to give it tempsy , you need to have happiness soo you can offer it .. it wil end up by giving from yourself soo much , that tempsy wont be anymore , even for him ..

wet cheeks ? i tell you something YOU CAN NOT CRY LOUD ENOUGH SO HIS HEART CAN HEAR YOU ANYMORE .. there voice on a difrent frequency now that his heart can not hear ..

it si not true that you can not live without him. life dont wait for anyone . it will be painfull yes , and empty yes but it will go onn.. and on... give your scars time to heal , and form .. soo in the future you will look and remember . and read on your heart wall , what battle was held here..

at last , i tell you we all miss tempsy , and miss her smile and her happy dance and happy face .. and we all wonder when tempsy will be back .. we all await her
CJ

Temps,

One of your previous poems was about this friend too and he told you that you will always have his friendship. He is a man of his word, our TJ and I know him well enough to know he will never let you fall.
Sometimes a relationship does not work out like we want it to and it hurts so deeply.
I think you have to take your time to let this wound heal and then you will be able to accept his offer of friendship.

*hugs*

5/5 Ingrid

This really delivers the heartfelt emotion of frienship i would not change a thing

I really liked this poem. I know exactly what you're going through because I am going through the exact same thing right now. It's so difficult. Great job!!

I liked this poem. I adore poems that are pulled off nicely without using rhyme or what seems to be syllable counts (this doesn't seem, not quite sure though).

It's a truthful poem that comes from the heart. A lot of times that's all it takes to make a beauty, but this time you've pulled it off w/more than just heartfelt/emotion words.

Kudos.