Creepy. I liked it. The whole poem and style of writing gave off an aura of a scary movie or something. Kinda gave me chills. It was unique to use the "love" of Valentines Day with the fear/superstion of "Friday the 13th". Good Job.

To be honest, I didn't realize it was Friday the 13th yesterday. It completely slipped my mind. How ironic though, a day of darkness, is followed by a day of love.

I think you have a really good talent Michael. Your rhymes are amazing, and you use them all so well. I really liked the idea you have in this poem, about a sort of dark love.

Actually, I read it over and over, and it really makes a lot of sense to me. I'm not sure if you did it intentionally, but what I got from this was just amazing.

"The reaper of hearts, you search for a soul"
That sounds like 'death' looking for love, or just another victim, hmm.. I like the suspense that line alone had for me.

"Who just can't get you out of his mind"
That line helps confirm my suspicion, 'death' is definitely on a lot of people's minds.

"Heaven only knows what in hell you'll find"
Nice little pun you threw in there.

"In the woods prowls the stalker, and prey"
Now this was my favourite line, because most people would read it as a carnivourous type stalker, but to me, it sounds like someone in love, and the prey is the person he loves. That's what I got from it at least.

Very creative! I really enjoyed the dark imagery and the play on love it had. Very well suited for the occasions. You got my vote for weekly contest!

Damn this gave more chills then i am already.. woo scary. i love it cuz it gave me that he's right behind u. watch out thingie. lol awesome job!
5/5

TaKe CaRe,
Frenchy

"The second month, the thirteenth day
The year is two thousand and nine
You're seen among the living, on your way
To find your love, who is your valentine"

^^I adore this opening stanza, I found it to be very powerful, so much emotion that it just pulls me right into the piece. However I don't think you need "the" in the first and second line.

"The reaper of hearts, you search for a soul
Who just can't get you out of his mind
Silence rules the night where you will stroll
Heaven only knows what in hell you'll find"

^^I think it would flow better if you removed "the" from the first line.
I really enjoyed the imagery here, and the last line really stands out to me, again so much power.

"No grave can hold you in the cold dark earth
He longs for that day he takes his last breath
As if he sees in you a way to seasonal rebirth
When he unites with you somehow in death"

^^Beautiful verse, I felt the last line added a touch of mystery, it had me wondering just how he would reunite in death, and left me intriqued (sp?), which kept me wanting to read further.

"Though the thought chills him to the bone
He waits for your kiss trembling with fear
Dreading each day that he must feel alone
He dreams of times you have been here"

^^I'm not to sure on this stanza, it seems a little weaker than the others which is incredibly strong throughout.

"Friday the thirteenth brings a magic spell
In the woods prowls the stalker, and prey
Somewhere between heaven and hell
Rises the passion of Valentines Day "

^^I adore this closing stanza, so much power and depth, and hard hitting, something that will certainly stay with the reader.

I liked how you mixed something so dark with the day of love, it made for a powerful transition on the overall piece.

Beautiful work.

The title drew me in :)

'The second month, thirteenth day
The year is two thousand and nine
You're seen among the living, on your way
To find your love, who is your valentine'

You started with a good flow, but the last line ruined a bit, I think you'd be better having it as 'To find your love; your valentine'. An intriguing opening though. :]

I found the rest of the poem a joy to read, I'm a big fan of dark poetry, and the flow and rhyme was consistent after that one line. :) Good work!

"The second month, thirteenth day
The year is two thousand and nine
You're seen among the living, on your way
To find your love, who is your valentine"
`Oh, Friday the 13th. I love how you wrote a poem about this. Its the day before Valentine's Day, we dont usually think of who our valentine is going to be on this day, or maybe we do.. but most of all we all think of Friday the 13th as a day full of superstition, we've all heard about this day.. anyways... Ill get to your poem and stop rambling!

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The reaper of hearts, you search for a soul
Who just can't get you out of his mind
Silence rules the night where you will stroll
Heaven only knows what in hell you'll find"
`Your words really darkened the mood, I'm amazed you did a great job while still keeping your words simple and to the point.

"No grave can hold you in the cold dark earth
He longs for that day he takes his last breath
As if he sees in you a way to seasonal rebirth
When he unites with you somehow in death"
`Well done, honestly youve pretty much mastered the flow and rhyme and the simplicity in your words is great because the poem is easy to understand.

"Though the thought chills him to the bone
He waits for your kiss trembling with fear
Dreading each day that he must feel alone
He dreams of times you have been here"
`Loved the "trembling with fear" - Great work! Loved the word choice.

"Friday the thirteenth brings a magic spell
In the woods prowls the stalker, and prey
Somewhere between heaven and hell
Rises the passion of Valentines Day"
`Powerful ending, kinda creeepy. Well done!

5/5.

Wow,i didn't even notice valentines day was right after friday the 13th!haha.well,it was a great twist on the whole ordeal of valentines day!gotta say i love your writing!its always so indepth && makes me think.
loveee.

Good, and with the movie that's not easy to do

Wow, this is excellent!!It is kind of creepy though. Bu a good kind of creepy. I absolutely love the last stanza it's incredibly amazing!!!!!!! My favorite poem!!!

Soda<3