Comments : Bitter Heart

  • 12 years ago

    by Michael D Nalley

    The genre you chose I must say was very effective in delivering your frustration. Most of us can relate to the mischief of Cupid, Eros or if you will our nature to be attracted to the passions that cause distress. I have written a few venting poems to let off steam if you know what in mean
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  • 12 years ago

    by Michael D Nalley

    PS The editting made it much easier to read

  • 12 years ago

    by kate

    I really liked this poem. =] you did an amazing job i have nothing to say anything about it just think its a wonderful and sad but wonderful poem.

    keep it up.
    keep on writing.
    love always and forever.

  • 12 years ago

    by Rolo

    A lot of emotion, mainly anger and I can even sense some regret. I find a lot of angry poems can take away from the craft and skill required for a good poem...but you were able to avoid that completely. It's a really nice piece and I enjoyed reading it a lot. 5/5.

    -Rolo

  • 12 years ago

    by dollwithafrown

    I really enjoyed this. The rhyming was really good, never sounded forced. There was a constant sense of bitterness and anger in the emotions of the words - and I'm a fan of bitter poetry. Haha. I really enjoyed this, good work.

  • I love it.
    And i know what your on about.

    My fave stanza is

    "Who was I to listen?
    **** the words you had to say
    Naive little heart
    More cynical every day"

    your poems is real, its blunt and its raw.
    Thats why i enjoyed reading it so much.

    5/5

  • 12 years ago

    by Jenni Marie

    "I take it all back
    And give you this instead
    Passionless anger
    *** this buzz in my head"

    ^^I don't think you need the "I" on the opening line.

    "Your words like a song
    A rhythmic repeat
    But I can't sing along
    I'm just a little offbeat"

    ^^I really liked this stanza, original and unique, a wonderful way to continue with the poem.

    "On the same page?
    We're reading two different books
    You must be the felony
    If I'm always the crook"

    ^^Favourite stanza of the piece. This is just downright amazing.

    "Change your form
    But you're still the same
    The same on the inside
    Just a new face and name"

    ^^Other favourite stanza of the piece, the depth and meaning here is incredibly portrayed.

    "Who was I to listen?
    **** the words you had to say
    Naive little heart
    More cynical every day

    Yeah I sound angry
    Like a childish fool
    But I am who I am
    A little hateful and cruel "

    ^^Beautiful way to wrap the piece up, so full of emotion and hard hitting at the end.

    I enjoyed this.