What a gem, Joe:)
So creative and discriptive....you really took me by surprise with this one!
Good luck on the contest:)

*hugs*

5/5 Ingrid

I must say this is a really uniqu poem... I like how different lines consist of words beginning with the same alphabet. The choice of words that you used really bright the poem to life. It was certainly a delightful to read.

Excellent Job
5/5

Well i must admit when i looked at this poem (without reading a word) i was like what a short poem! and i wasn't expecting much from it but you incorporated so much into four lines and fourteen words man! i am impressed
i liked how in each line the words all started with the same letter and i loved the vocabulary you used it was very mature
i liked this poem i definitely won't forget it i mean you created something very unique here
5/5

Wow! As someone said above me, i noticed it was so short! But what you did with it was perfect!

I liked how it was short and sweet yet the words you used we're so..vivid and imaginative that it made me think of what you were describing and actually imagining it!

Wonderful
5/5

Well, you've used strong words... seems words are just eating up the lines. Sometimes I feel we should use simpler words to express.
Otherwise it's a well written poem.

Wow, now this is like a tongue-twister, definitely. It was fun to read - not in the sense that I enjoyed it [even though I did!] but it was fun because I was amusing myself seeing how quickly I could see each line!

"Dreary delta dorsal devoid,"

^^ This first line paints such a horrid, dull picture, of dreary life and withered nature.

I was therefore happily surprised and intrigued when the sunshine came along, and we were introduced to such lovely detailed descriptions of sunshine in all its glory:

"Summers superfluous superheat
eluding eclipse effectively."

^^ Beautiful! <3

Good luck on the contest Joe. Awesome word choice and imagery in this piece.
Take Care
Cindy

Hmmm. I love how there is the alliteration, it does make such a short poem very deep. I expeccially like how V and E are used, since V is rare, and although E is common it has a strange sound, and doesnt always make the same sound. Its a bit hard to distinguish, i had to read it twice. The verbs dont pop out that much, so I had trouble making sense of it before i looked up words and realised what they meant. Once I got that I liked it a lot, but it seemed like a lot of workd for a poem, lol