I'm not going to lie, some of this was rather difficult for me to understand, though I enjoyed the challenge of trying to figure it out.

"A seraph, perched
Atop an opaline moon
Honey tears bleed from crystalline eyes,
Falling; tumbling stardust"

^^ The opening lines here created a beautiful image of this gorgeous angel who, although perfect looking, is so utterly broken.

"Trail of saffron scintillas
Disintegrating into amber snowdrops;
Star-kissed notes, trickling
To meet the night."

^^ Although the imagery here is absolutely stunning; the word-choice is so poetic especially... I don't quite understand what it means. Where are the scinitillas coming from?

Overall the imagery and word usage in this piece was simply outstanding and beautiful. Despite the fact it took me a while to understand some of it... well, that's the beauty of poetry, isn't it?

Wow... The imagery is pretty outstanding. Then theres that break in the middle that gives the reader time to process everything so far. Its awesome. Wow.

Wow from the 1st few lines of the poem, i can tell that it must have took you quite some time to craft this poem.The vocab that you used was absolutely brilliant. I'm not really sure whether my interpretation of this poem is correct. But my guess is, this poem explores the journey of a secret love between you and your asian lover(but then again i might be wrong). I also like the fact that you have two contrasting stanza to tell your short story poem splited into 2 parts.

Overall, i must say that you have craft this poem til perfection

Excellent Job
5/5

It says on your profile that you're sixteen, for your age I think you know a lot about poetry and looking through some of your work, it's evident you have a natural talent shining through.

'A seraph, perched
Atop an opaline moon
Honey tears bleed from crystalline eyes,
Falling; tumbling stardust
To nocturne zephyrs; insubstantial.'

Some lovely language here that could do with being tamed. I don't think 'honey' connotes what you want it too, and the imagery you've used is very silver, and shiny. To add honey just confuses it, I think.
As honey doesn't tumble. This poem reminds me very much of another poet on this site, her name is Nyellmoonlight. 'Opaline moon' was fantastic.

'Darkness is no stranger
Nor secret here; cryptic truths rest
Behind the reflection (quivering)
Of dissolved memories'

Nice sentence structuring here, you've obviously thought the syntax out properly, and the added use of parenthesis breaks the flow and draws our attention to the verb which suggests to me, or echoes the sadness that was depicted earlier on.

'Trail of saffron scintillas
Disintegrating into amber snowdrops;
Star-kissed notes, trickling
To meet the night.'

It's strange here because you repeat that honey imagery, but at the top, it stands a bit out of place. If you'd used it here, it'd fit in with the 'trickling' and the amber snowdrops you've portrayed. It's a shame how 'star-kissed' has become somewhat cliched over the past year or so...

'Aurous veils, glimmering,
Windblown from eastern skies
Liquid sound spirals in a golden chalice,
Falling; tumbling star-song '

Beautiful language here, you've hidden meaning behind a fortress of linguistics! I liked the repetition of 'falling; tumbling', although 'star' seems somewhat overused in this piece. I suppose if you changed 'star-kissed' in the previous stanza..

'Magic is no stranger
Nor secret here; hidden hopes sing
Within the warmth (trembling)
Of melted fantasies.'

I like the contrast of darkness and magic, the saddening imagery described, onto the sweet portrayal of the teardrops, to the sincere magic.

The poem reads like a mirrored event of something simple, just depicted with complex lexis. I won't take a stab at the meaning because I think one person's guess is as good as the other's, I don't think a poem like this should have a definite meaning. When I first read it, it read to me like a journey through the night to the morning, the convergence to equilibrium at the end, with the character just being symbolised as an angel.

Excellent work.

The imagery really sparkles. It makes everything written feel so serene. 5/5

Excellent poem... Keep up this good work (5/5)

This is a rare poem, so much emotion behind the words is not something that is easy to find in poems. This was an excellent one. The imagery was amazing! The first few lines caught my attention and the rest kept me reading for more. The vocab was perfect, it made it different from other poems. Absolutly wonderful!

5/5 two thumbs up!

Your poem was very artistic and stood out from all the others that I have read. I like how you wrote a dark poem without using explicit content. Your description was very good and I loved the vast range of vocabulary that you used to describe what you were seeing. Great Job. 5.5

This poem is absolutely beautiful. Your word choice is amazing. I think it is so greatly written and it flows so well. This is an awesome poem. I really have no criticisms. It seems very delicate and soft with the words that are used. Everything glows so great and is so beautiful its a great masterpiece!!!

You did an amazing job here in this piece. strong emotions and very powerful. it gave me a good imagine in my mind. it was dark indeed. n i loved it. i love how you ended it. amazing job i shall say again. plz do keep it up!!
forsure 5/5

TaKe CaRe,
Frenchy

It was an alright poem, but it did not seem to special to me. It lacked something I could not quite place, maybe some misplaced emotion of some sort. Sorry, I just feel that it needs improvement of some sort.
Peace and prosperity,

(RKD)

Nice job

Wow. I think that's about all I can say. That was just so amazing. Your word choice was brilliant. Imagry.. was incredible. They only part that bothered me at all was that it didn't flow.. and I just have a thing for poems that flow. But nevertheless it was fantastic.

Cayce