Comments : Naomi's Poem

  • 15 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    "When I'm down and feeling blue,
    On the floor broke in two,
    A stream of tears roll down each cheek,
    I stutter words, I cannot speak,
    You seem to sense that I'm in bits,
    My broken heart you rush to fix,
    No stumbled steps, through rain and hail,
    You're by my side without a fail."

    Wow, I am completely speechless. I rarely read such friendship poems filled with such emotion and love for your friend. This is so touching to know that your friend will always be there for you, and will stick to your side no matter what life brings along.

    "When I feel all hope is gone,
    You are my strength to carry on,
    My spirits broken, you show me dreams,
    You're my sun that forever beams.
    Each laugh we share a smile shall follow,
    We live for today, we'll conquer tomorrow,
    No sickness can stop us, no journeys too far,
    Cause through this all babe, you've been my shooting star"

    Excellent rhyming and flow that held much meaning. To know that you have such lucky a friend is so comforting and such a blessing. Hold them close to your heart, this friend sounds like a true miracle. This stanza was sweet but deep, and you clearly made your point. I really loved this write, it deeply touched my heart as will others. What would you do without friends? They help you so much in life, help you through the losses and struggles.

    5/5 from me, keep up the great work!

    God Bless You And Take Care!