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by RavishingEruption   Mar 30, 2009


Lips touching lips
Palms touching palms
All I do is utter your name
And the chaos around me calms

Holding hands
Holding hearts
Scared from the past
But anxious for those sparks

Friends being more
Love being grown
The usual monotony
Has taken on a vibrant tone

Passion flooding up
Passion rushing in
The title doesn't matter
As much as what's within

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  • 16 years ago

    by xToBeWithYoux

    I love this Tara!! I love how the end stanza ties in with it being untitled, and I like it being untitled, gives it a sense of mystery.

    I love it, 5/5

    Keep writing,
    Emily :)

  • 16 years ago

    by InvisiblyHeartless

    This is interesting.
    Personally, I think it needs to be a little longer.
    I also didn't like the last stanza, it sort of threw the poem into a weird place.
    I like the way you repeat the middle word in the first two lines of stanza 1 and 3.
    I enjoyed it, maybe change the last stanza or make it longer would make it better. A little more emotion too, but it sounds good.

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