I like the way you speak of
leafy poetry,
how your tongue starts to tremble
over the slightest rustle
of vitality,
(at least I imagine that it does)

^^^What a beautiful opening here, I like how you blend
nature within this poem.For the 3rd line, i interprete
it as this person stutters at time when he sees you
(but i might be wrong)

have the winds of intrigue
shifted
from calm ponds
to a more stirring nature

^^^Well I'm not sure whther you are just reffering
this to just nature or using it as a metaphor. But
I interprete it as, you are trying to take friendship to
another level(then again i might be wrong)

I wouldn't know,
yesterday
my hair had gone and mussed itself
whether your fingers swam there
like pert fish
or not

^^^ Well this is an interesting ending.I like the way
you used pert fish swimming to describe ur mussed hair
I can visualize the body of the fish wriggle hence
trying to messup up ur hair. From my interpretation
I think what you're trying to say is that, you are still
clueless as both his words and yours have gone unspoken
(well i might be wrong)

Overall I like how you experimented on this poem.Though
you may have your own interpretation of this poem. It's
interesting how other readers can come up with a different
interpreation.I really enjoyed reading it. Keep it up

Excellent Job
5/5

I like the way you speak of
leafy poetry,
how your tongue starts to tremble
over the slightest rustle
of vitality

I really like this verse and the comparison of
leafy poetry & language. THe mistakes as
well as stumbling for words just like a leaf..
beautifully penned!