I see myself in the water
My image is clearly seen
But all I see is a fiend
An to loneliness a martyr

(Great opening, i would fix the last line though..it's a little off)

The image facing me pulls me into myself
I can't look away for fear of being erased
After all i never did finish lives race
And now I am steadily loosing health

(Great imagery and detail here. makes me feel like i'm watching a movie)

I don't even realize the image
I have been lying all along
Everything I have been doing has been wrong
All of me on the surface will soon diminish

(I like how you keep saying image, it makes me wonder if your really looking at yourself or not)

This face haunts me
It shows no kindness,love,or joy
This loneliness awakening inside of me is making me paranoid
The pain of my past again I'm starting to see

(Great, i love the mixture of emotions)

I'm hollow inside
I am only a show on the surface
Now I'm only loneliness on the inside for I've left the rest
For now in solitude I resign

(Nice here too, i can feel your pain in this stanza)

The reflection in the water is beginning to fade
Now I'm beginning to think again
At all the times and when
I would just sit in loneliness and into depression I laid

(good consider changing the last line to "I would just sit in loneliness and into depression i would lay" seems better to me)

The face is now gone and that seems like a better perfection
For now I am gone
And now to loneliness from my suffering I belong
As I remember again that haunting reflection

(Great work. i think this was one of my favorites. Keep it up. Shanik)

I reallyl ike your rhyme scheme. But again, it seems a little forced. Though, I don't thnk you would have to change it because the emotion is pretty good and kind of over-powers the flow.

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Line 4 and 7, i think you have some type errors, sorry if they're are intentional. But apart from that, I loved the imagery, your poem is depressing but i think that is intentional, so well done. I really like this poem.

WOw... this is quite deep.. EmOtiOns very well-expressed.

``After all i never did finish lives race
--. 'I' shOuld be capitalized =).

``For now in solitude I resign
--> I think it shOuld either be 'FOr nOw TO sOlitude I resign' Or 'FOr nOw in sOlitude I REIGN' I think the first One is better suited tO ur meaning.

``For now I am gone
--> Maybe it shOuld be 'FOr I am nOw gOne' cuz the flOw Otherwise seems off, but just a suggestiOn..

All in all, I think it's a great write and give it a 5/5! :)
Keep It Up!

Well crafted poem!!!! Good job for this!