Very cool Ingrid, I have never heard of this form before, it sounds like a bunch of fun! Nice work here, you mastered this form in my eyes. Great wording that is very thought-provoking...

5/5 from me, take care!

~MaryAnne

Well done. Now you need to write one telling us why you survive and what tough is. I am a survivor and I am tough because I refuse to let life get me down and keep me there. Good job.

Ingrid,

You have managed this form very well indeed. I agree with Sylvia, it provokes more thought the more you peal away possible meanings.

What makes a survivor, being tough, or having to survive makes you tough? I mean, what came first the chicken or the egg?

Very well done.

Michael

((hugs)) xx

I think you do well with taking a title and putting it into a form and with such few words giving us that message that youre trying to get across to us.

However, I personally believe that within such few words you can greatly expand on your thoughts and the message youre trying to get across from us.

Soo my suggestion is to try and go back to free-verse writing, or a rhyming poem is fine too.. whatever it takes to make a longer poem.

I think that form poems are quite easy to write, in fact you can have one done in 5 minutes, because not much thinking needs to go into it. Its like a spur of the moment thing, when we get this great idea we just write it down in a short form and call it done.

Expand! I think short forms are great and a challenge, but with such few words I know theres mroe youd want to say, but with the restricted form, you cant do that. I thought you did well with this the way it is... but perhaps pull yourself away from the different forms of poetry for a while and spend a decent amount of time writing your poems and expanding on your ideas. Spending an hour on a poem and making it more in depth is much better in my opinion then a form as short as this one, with such few words that have soo much more to say.

5/5.

Temps [Beyond a Poets Mind]

To put into a few words the meaning of such subject, and to do it so good only shows the tallent and passion for writing deep within you.
I am not familiar with many of the different form and styles of poetry, but you make each one look so simple.
Keep up the great work my friend.
Paul...

I enjoyed the question at the end: it always leaves you thinking! (which is exactly what a good poem should have you doing.) Great write!

mandy :)