Comments : My love of daydream

  • 14 years ago

    by BlueEyedMystery

    Aww, don't we all want a guy like this? Haha. Yeah, Prince Charming would be a wonderful guy to have.

    I'm searching for a missing fellow,
    -- I love how you used the word fellow. I haven't really seen it used a lot, but it fit perfectly into the kind of poem you wrote. It make me think "Gentleman". I don't know why. It just does. :]

    but a tight pair of Levi's he'll sport.
    -- This line made me laugh, because I was thinking of midevil times with knights and prince's and kings, and then jeans. It just brought me back to present day.

    he stole a Cinderella story kiss.
    -- I always love when I read poems with princesses. It just makes it.. I don't know magical, and almost kid-like. I miss thinking that those guys exist, but maybe they do. I just haven't found any. lol

    he's running a little late.
    -- Exactly. They're always running late. It makes you wonder if they'll ever show up. :\

    I thought it was a pretty good poem. It didn't really stand out like I would have liked to see, but definitely not bad.

    Keep writing!

    Cayce

  • 14 years ago

    by Annaam

    I like it... It's very cute actually! :) Very relateable tO hOw I felt nOt sO lOng agO..

    A nice write!! The rhyming is goOd and I like the vOcab chOice.. I specially lOve the end! :).

    5/5 frOm Me! :)
    Keep It Up!

  • 14 years ago

    by Lady Nik

    This is beautiful. I really enjoyed reading it. I smiled the whole time. I love the imagery and your diction is amazing. Keep up the greats work hun. Shanik