Comments : It's Not Your Fault You Hurt Me

  • 14 years ago

    by Marc Ortiz

    Well it was a personal poem... Though I don't like the title haha. Coz it reminds me of the break up line girls always use to break up with me. "Its not you its me"

    Anyway serious time.

    I think to improve this poem you should focus on the (tenses) coz it can confuse the reader.

    Also I think to improve this you should not use 'I' too much. It can ruin the flow of the poem.

    Another suggestion I have in mind is.
    You should put the poem in stanzas. Structure of a poem is a - plus plus.

    Anyway its up to you really on how you write your poems. In my opinion there is no bad poem - as long as you write from your heart.

  • 14 years ago

    by Esther

    I like this poem, beggining and end, it kind of wavers in the middle, and the flow changes, but despite that I still think it is good, if this is real, then i am sorry.

  • 14 years ago

    by Alyx

    Very nice, I like the way it flows on its own. I think you put alot of yourself into this poem... like I said, very nice.

    Alyx